Can you help me in this poem? (grammatical mistakes) and also if you may place it on the scale from 0-9?

Zahid my friend. I'm mystified with "...cure modesty" for to me, modesty is not a disease but I might have missed on what you meant and I will appreciate it if you enlighted me. L3S1, ..."if in wealth you are;" a period after "clue". S2 - "tension's abundance" or "tensions abundant". L4 there should be a "The" before "growth". For S3 "Lets" should be "Let's". I think you meant ""devil friends"" not "devils friends". A period after "ends" of L2S3. For L3, "come a step..." and period after "ahead". and a period after "bed". Anyway, these are merely my opinions, it's still your call میرے اچھے دوست